NAME : INDAH LESTARI
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WRITIG II
"BAAYUN MULUD"
Baayun Mulud or Baayun
Children Ceremony is one of the traditional Islamic costume in South Borneo. One tradition Banjar society carried out during the important month of birth of the
Prophet Muhammad. This ceremony is performance in the mosque. The mosque in the
middle of the room made a swing that strectch on poles mosque. The swing is made there are three layers. The top layer of fabric use sasirangan, the middle
layer of yellow cloth and the bottom layer of fabric wear bahalai. On the rope swing adorned with af shaped woven artificial
bird, halilipan, katupat bangsur, kambang sarai, chains. The people usually make ornaments using fruits or
traditional cakes such as bowsprit, rings, bracelets cake, banana, coconut, and
others. Participants Baayun Mulud is not
limited to infants who are in the village that implement it. But it is okay to
participants from other village come to enliven. Even today there are still
people who are old baayun participate because they felt as a child
did not get to join the ceremony baayun Mulud. The purpose rocked at the
time was to take the blessings of the glory of the Prophet Muhammad SAW. Parents who attended
hoping that rocked the child becomes an obedient people, have fear of Allah and
His Messenger. The tradition is carried in bulk as a reflection of gratitude to Allah SWT for an abundance of grace and the gift of the birth of Prophet Muhammad .
Adorn : Menghiasi, put the decorations.
Baayun Mulud: Baayun Children Ceremony, one of the traditional Islamic costume in South
Kalimantan.
Enliven :
Memeriahkan
Glory : Kemenangan, victory,
keagungan.
Sasirangan : Sarigading
Strectch : Of something soft or
elastic
Swing : Ayunan, buaian
Yellow cloth : Calico fabrics
that are colored yellow from turmeric extract
1. The first,i want to comment your topic sentence . i think your topic sentence is good but i want suggest you for add article in your topic sentence. for example "in South Borneo" you can add article "in the South Bornio".
BalasHapus2. The Second, I think your supporting sentence good but i found the error sentence supporting sentence two " This ceremony is performance in the mosque" please repaire it.
3. In the third, Concluding sentence i think is not clearly. Please make clearly
4. and then you can use the signal word. It is make easy the reader for understanding you paragraph
thank you indut *)
your paragraph is good but if you want be better you can add transignal like the first, second, third and etc :)
BalasHapusi think your paragraph is good because you good choose topic and good information, definition. in topic is perfect and cocluding not have problem and good. but in supporting sentence you have problem because you don't use transition signal but your paragraph unity and coherence, and good explanation. and then in your explanation strange words be better you use english language don't indonesian language. don't forget edit your paragraph before publication. and i hope my comment make your paragraph be better than before. im sorry if gag have mistakes in my comment. good luck indah :)
BalasHapus